Can you help me revise the Rhetorical Analysis paper?

I am writing a Rhetorical Analysis paper for my English class. I am required to find out two rhetorical strategies and one rhetorical appeal that the author use in the article which is related to my major (accounting). I got feedback from my professor and the problems for my paper is that lack organization and examples take from the article.

Can you find some specific examples from the article for each strategies and appeal? Also, I am not sure if I need to focus on another rhetorical appeal or strategies, can you check with it? Can you add some recommendations of how the author can improve his article at the end of the conclusion? Also, can you help me with the grammar errors?

I will upload the article, can you please help me with the problems? Thank you so much.